Those who have chosen to reside in the cave
Have undoubtedly decided to be a knave,
A knave because they are mentally enslaved.
Now those who fight with all their might
Must first endure the pain of no sight.
Pain is but a miniscule feeling
When compared to the triumph of gaining knowledge and being set free.
At first, you won't see clearly
Being blinded by light will hurt dearly,
Even breaking from the shackles will be a pain
But is it not better a little pain for a gain?
Now unshackle those chains,
Live a life of truth,
And question every bit of information introduced
And nothing but carefree happiness will reign.
WOW THAT IS AMAZING!!
ReplyDeleteIt followed the structure of the sonnet and ha a good meaning. I like it,good job :)
ReplyDeleteI really liked your content, incredibly creative structure/execution, but (as far as the article ive researched: http://www.dummies.com/how-to/content/writing-a-sonnet.html) a sonnet has a specific rhyming scheme of ABAB as in say one line would end in Cave (A), the next say light(B), the following after that would be knave (A), the stanza ending with another B as in sight, but again the article says this is only the shakespearean style of sonnet writing so there could be other varied ways. Other than that great job Feli!
ReplyDeleteThis is so good. I wish I would have read this before I wrote mine. This is something i could see published somewhere. I like how you included an image. It really helped me to get the picture you were describing.
ReplyDeleteYou always do such a great job with everything (: I love your rhymes!!
ReplyDeleteCan you please comment on mine
http://epereyrarhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/?m=1
You have some great knowledge of the story but I really feel that the rhyming pattern could have been a little more structured. You did do an awesome job at the content in the sonnet I just feel the flow of the rhyming could have been different.
ReplyDeleteAlthough this sonnet contains fantastic in-depth analysis and metaphysical concepts, I have one slight issue with the sonnet. The way this sonnet is structured I have trouble finding a fluidity in the poem as far as a rhyming pattern goes but nevertheless it is quite spectacular.
ReplyDeleteWhile I'm not sure it follows the sonnet structure exactly (at least, not a Shakespearean sonnet, as Hayden pointed out), it was still enjoyable. I liked the inspirational quality your sonnet has, especially in the last few lines. One other small detail you could change is the tenses at the beginning. You start out with plural ("those") and then use singular in the next line ("a knave"). It's a really nit-picky thing, but something to look into if you're making edits.
ReplyDeleteI particularly enjoyed the way you strayed from a summary of what happened, and instead you focused more on the theme of the allegory. Nice job! I really enjoyed reading this to "Cherry's Dance of Death"
ReplyDeleteGreat Sonnet. I felt the feelings behind every word!
ReplyDeleteNice job Feli! Yeahh the structure was a tad off. But I am sure others already let you know. :) I feel the emotions behind the words though! :)
ReplyDeleteComment mine plz!
http://sramirezrhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/2012/11/blog-post_23.html
You did a great job...i think you emphasized the deep meaning behind the story!..
ReplyDeletecomment mine too..plz..and thx..
http://mchenrhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/2012/11/my-allegory-in-cave.html#comment-form
Your sonnet isreally good! It's really deep and I feel like there's alt of meaning(:
ReplyDeleteYour rhyming was very good but I thought we had to try to write in iambic pentameter; however your sonnet was still awesome.
ReplyDeleteGreat job :3
ReplyDeleteYou should be a poet Feli!
ReplyDeleteSeriously, one of the best I've read so far. Do you write poetry often? I'm curious because you have a really good writing voice from what I can tell.
http://bcastillorhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/
You did a good job Feli. Your rhyming was great and I liked how you added a picture to go with your meaning.
ReplyDeleteVery inspirational like Josh said previously but I did get a little mixed up with the rhyming scheme. All around good job though.
ReplyDeleteI can honestly say, I visualize you reciting the sonnet! Good job feli. I like how you added a picture.
ReplyDeleteI did enjoy this sonnet! Especially the first two lines "Those who have chosen to reside in the cave/Have undoubtedly decided to be a knave". For some reason that made me smile, haha.
ReplyDelete"Pain is but a miniscule feeling
ReplyDeleteWhen compared to the triumph of gaining knowledge and being set free."
I really liked this line, I was thinking about this concept but I didn't know how to word it. You wrote it perfectly!
Good job, Feli!
Can you comment on my blog please :)
i liked the entireee poem! but if i had to choose it would be the last two lines for sureee. :) comment on mine please :)http://danig14.blogspot.com/
ReplyDeleteAwesome! Loved the deeper meaning that is shown!
ReplyDeleteThe beginning is what got me. It was great.
ReplyDeletePlease comment on mine
http://pkimrhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/2012/11/allegory-of-caves-sonnet.html
Not bad
ReplyDeleteYour rhyming is different...but I like it. ^.^
ReplyDelete-Trevor